RavenWind

[ravenwind]

Name: RavenWind (formerly Raven Gliding on the wind)

Clan: FireClan

Age:31 moons

Position: Medi Cat

Gender: Tom

Appearance: small short haired jet black cat with gray front paws. although he is small he is swift and very powerful with large paws and curved claws. was the swiftest prey-hunter in his tribe due to is thin streamline frame and very long tail. he has strong back legs and can jump more the 4x higher then his height. he has dark amber eyes that seems to lighten or darken with his mood.

Personality: he is loving and very caring, first was a warrior until he decided he could help his clan more by learning to heal them. very smart knowing even when he was a "to be" that there had to be more then just hunting. struggled to prove that only starclan knows what a cat should do no mater where they came from.

Family/History: Former prey-hunter of the tribe of endless sky, thrown out since he did not believe that prey-hunters and Valley gaurds should be decided at birth.

mother: Fawn running on the moor- swift black PH 47 moons
father: Eagle resting on sunning rock- large grey PH 43 moons
sister: fire that dances at dusk VG 31 moons
mother is decesed

Other: left the tribe thinking there is more then being just a prey
hunter, as he wandered he found the clans, at first was not sure they would take him.showed that he could be a useful and loyal warrior and them conviced them he would be a fine medi cat.

sorry i did not see the modfy button thank you

[ravenwind]

clan is FireClan not ThymeClan sorry i did not catch that

[Jess]

Hmm. It needs some work....and you can modify it. I'll tell you how to modify it. So..there's a little button that says 'modify'. It should be right at the top of the post to the right.

Ok...The description needs to be more descriptive. And maybe you could find a picture so you can describe him better.
The history could say more. Like the names of the parents, and how he came upon the clans. And there could be more personality traits for his personality. Click here for a list of personality traits. And maybe you could write in sentences?

[ravenwind]

more detail on his Appearance and Personality:
small short haired jet black cat with gray front paws. although he is small he is swift and very powerful with large paws and curved claws. was the swiftest prey-hunter in his tribe due to is thin streamline frame and very long tail. he has strong back legs and can jump more the 4x higher then his height. he has dark amber eyes that seems to lighten or darken with his mood.

Personality: he is loving and very caring, first was a warrior until he decided he could help his clan more by learning to heal them. very smart knowing even when he was a "to be" that there had to be more then just hunting. struggled to prove that only starclan knows what a cat should do no mater where they came from.

[Jess]

Great. Accepted, but try harder next time. And use proper grammar and such